Episode 1: Holy Adverbs, Batman!

We’ve all heard the warning about too many adverbs, but they’re not always a cardinal writing sin. In our inaugural episode, D.C. and Avery will share a drink and revise an old snippet of Avery’s writing with an eye on adverbs. Which ones can stay and which can be tweaked?

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Episode 1 Cocktails:

Too Many Adverbs:
  • 1.5 oz Gin
  • ½ oz Elderflower
  • ½ oz Lime
  • ¾ oz Lemon
  • ¾ oz simple syrup
  • Splash of seltzer

Shake all except seltzer in a shaker with ice, then pour into a highball glass with ice and top with the seltzer.

Adverbs, Revised:
  • 2.5oz gin
  • 1.5oz lemon
  • 1 oz honey syrup 
  • Splash of club soda

Shake all except club soda in a shaker with ice, then pour into a highball glass with ice and top with the club soda.

Excerpts for Episode 1:


The creature’s claws gripped my ankle tightly as I was nearly through the window. It screamed loudly as it gave my leg a violent tug. I fell back jarringly against the outside wall and my leg twisted in the ghoul’s grip. Its deadly-sharp talons tore through my trousers and the light suede boots I wore, to rip open the flesh beneath. My head hit the stone wall hard, and my vision flashed blood red and virulent green with the pain. I cried out harshly in pain and terror, scrabbling against the stone futilely. The creature’s deadly grip on my ankle and leg was the only thing holding me as I dangled precariously upside down, halfway out of the window.


The ghoul clutched my ankle, and gave my leg a violent tug as I scrambled through the window. I tumbled against the outside wall, and the talons tore through my trousers, ripping open the flesh of my twisted leg. My head struck the wall, and my vision flashed crimson. I cried out in pain, scrabbling against the stone to find purchase.

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